My True Thoughts of You

[Soulcatcher4]

Badness!!!!!! Really... bad poem!!!


I look back on the years
I look back on what you've done wrong
I look at your Fancies and fears
I look at you undying hatred of long
You're an embarrassment
You're so rude
You're in need of enlightenment
You're so crude
You make me sick
You make me cry
You make me tick
You make me sigh
I can't believe this is me
I look at you however, and you make me forget
I believe what you see is beyond me
I thought and thought, but it was something I wouldn't get
Then it hit me
Then I understood you
Then on I couldn't believe I didn't see
Then I knew I love you

[Aiden]

This ones cool. It goes slowly from one feeling to another. Very well written. why don't you like it?

[piñata]

Yeah, really... it's good stuff. Are you just trying to be overly modest like Ape Killer?

[Soulcatcher4]

really? I just thought it was really bad because of the words choices I made, like your hatred of long

[Aiden]

I like the simple words, they explain stuff better.

[piñata]

Yeah, I agree with Aiden on that one. Besides, as with your other poem, you could've picked worse words to rhyme there.

Like "dong". ;D

[Aiden]

or "bong" lol. aw, that's really bad. but oh well.