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Post by Ape on May 6, 2006 7:08:37 GMT -5
I havn't written in a VERY long time and i'm very rusty. So here's another peice of crap to throw in with the rest of the collection of my peices of crap on this site. So many months of silence a fog of featureless durations rushes across the windswept hills and envelopes the cleverness of creation Contact with self intensifies never did i expect such replies when one is alone the world simplifies no outside influence to tell you their lies That fog that left me blind secluded me from the rest but the words that forever pined now are dying and suppressed I no longer feel so stranded I am strengthened with repair and though once falling I've now landed in a pool of black despair Was i so careless once again it seems as though happiness is rare I cannot escape this ensuing madness I cannot solve this puzzle nightmare
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Post by Predator-Fan on May 8, 2006 12:39:13 GMT -5
Wow.....I.....wow!!!!! I am really impressed! Are you sure your not pulling my leg about not writing in a long time?
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Post by AnimaStone on May 8, 2006 20:34:42 GMT -5
A few minor issues with the length of a few of the lines... but overall it's good.
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Post by piñata on May 9, 2006 9:50:10 GMT -5
Yeah, considering you haven't written in a long time it's even more impressive than that. Better than a lot of my stuff (although I haven't posted my most recent one here yet... afraid some of the new female members will be offended by the S&M overtones : . Anyway, it's not your best, but it's still pretty damn good.
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